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Avatar Amonakur Jedi Simon
getting better ....
Let's see this song

effect ok
intro ok, drums are not good, use live samples and not electronic slow samples. they loose bit range and result in empty sounds
slow motion effect with slowing turning effects
Voice is very good, and melody too
piano is very nice
when the faster part start there is a mistake in the drum part
it's not accelerating in a proper way and has no volume grow
atmosphere is good in the second part
effects are of the same kind, in the first part of the second bit
then the tune goes back to the first slow motion tune
sfffffhhhhhh sounds repeated so many times slow down rhythm and create a sleepy effect
water drops effects are good
ethnic effects are good
the third part of the song il lost somewhere, and we cannot see where it is going
listen to this bit by itself, without the song. Isolate it.
See if it works by itself.
No echo again, and try it in mono and stereo.
you will see that it lacks again form the point of view of harmonic field and resonances, and arrangement.
I guess that your voice changes are what i love best.
Atypical, and very interesting.
Scales are used in a different way.
Love them.
At minute 4, the third change starts. See that it is messy? Effect take place in a non consequential way. Voices get mixed up. Over tracking is not a solution here. In this case you should work on stronger melodies and make it easier for the listener to catch the tune.
After 44 seconds from minute 4, then you go back to the first tune, with no real melodic or harmonic solution. Music is not made of bricks. You are not playing LEGO. Please take care. Working is this way, is a good exercise, but nevertheless, consciousness is the best gift.

From second 240 to 248 there is a messy solution. Bad done.
Then things are getting a little better, with flutes.
I get the feeling that there are too many flutes and voices, then suddenly the tune ends.
This happens when there is intention in what you are doing, but casual and random choices take place. It is still music, but it is not a very good one.

I liked the conga sound, but if we consider the number of tracks that we can read here, and that you have recorded, even if it is not really great, these tracks get mixed up. So, just imagine an orchestra with 350 sound created at the same time. It would turn into a great chaos.

There are rules in anything. Karmic ones. Dharma. Rhythm. Rita. Ritual. Beat, and just as in poetry, make the whole thing work.

This is to help you.

with love.

Avatar Amonakur Jedi Simon
www.jedisimon.com

Большое вам спасибо!!!

magic-in-you,
Эта песня мне приснилась.... она когда то существовала, точнее сама мелодия, во времена Атлантиды. А слова я написала сейчас. На самую волнующую меня тему. Почему мы НАВСЕГДА останемся одинокими. Пока не примем в сердце всю Вселенную, счастья нам не видать!

Мне тоже лёд понравился очень

Дааа, она элитаррррна !!!

Странно,почему так мало артистов поет на тему смысла жизни и вообще чего-нибудь кроме "любви"? Таки просторы ведь открыты. Голос конечно же супер,редко у кого такой высокий,у меня вообще как у вороны))

песня очень хорошая,у Валерии очень красивый голос)))

Музыка (мелодия) цепляет, аранжировка очень необычная.
Хотелось бы узнать про содержание:
Валерия, как к вам "пришла" эта песня? Что вызвало вдохновение?
Во многих ваших песнях я узнаю себя, думаю, конечно я не всё понимаю и в них скрыт Ваш личный смысл, но для себя я нахожу в словах - свой.
Спасибо.

очень понравилась эта песня,а особенно её припев!